Someone asked me to provide clarification on my previously posted comment. OK, no problem…
In my previous comment, I suggested a list of items that I think should or should not be in the lyric-to-be for our class song. Specifically, in my opinion, the lyric should have the school name 樹人 and class name 鵬恆; it should mention old-days Tho-Nhon school activities; it should be simple to understand language; it should not be casually written since the song presents the whole class; it should sound reasonably like a class song (像样點) so that we, our class, will not be mocked at (不讓人嘲笑); and classmates should speak up with candid opinion and suggestion.
Those are my suggestions which are not, implicitly or explicitly, pointing to the first or second draft lyric under review. If people think my points have been addressed or embedded in the first or second draft, that is their opinion; if people believe my suggestions make no sense, it is also their opinion. I welcome all opinions.
On a side note, I normally praise classmates’ writing on web through comment section either because I like it or in the form of encouragement. I sometimes do joke with classmates, but I have never criticized anyone’s writing, knowing my weakness in Chinese language, and have never mocked using the term such as “感到啼笑皆非”like some people like to use. Also, in the past, I have been asked by classmate A to secretly correct an alleged wrong word in a published article written by classmate B, but I refused to do something behind a person’s back, and when I counter suggested classmate A to inform classmate B directly of the observation, classmate A backed out in fear of offending classmate B. Yet, classmate A would try to persuade me to correct someone’s writing in an under-the-table, sneaky manner. That is one of the many examples of tasks I have been asked to do in private but would not do when it comes to people’s writing. Being a person in charge of the web, I always try to be impartial and unbiased in my work, and fair to everyone within my reach.
Having said that, I hope that our classmates speak up own opinion about the class song instead of holding back and watching the “show.”
Chanh Tinh and Hue Nga,
ReplyDeleteBoth of you are great in music and writing, keep working hard!!!
B.lien
謝謝大家.終於給我機会能幫網站做
ReplyDelete点事. 正星.
惠娥, 正星
ReplyDelete記得去年樹人校友會正星曾說過: 我周身刀,沒有一把利! 現在正是你表現的時候了.
惠娥的詞, 加上正星的音樂, 如果二位能合唱的話,那就更完整. 我們亦算有了一首 “班歌” 或 “網歌” 了? 對嗎? 大家覺得怎樣?
水鳳
水鳳
ReplyDelete正星創作的歌若能獲得大家所接受為班歌，那應請大家練習同聲合唱，倘若不為大家所接受，那我和他合唱也無妨，在每一次的洛城聚會時大家同學來同聲齊唱一定很有趣。班歌應為本班所創立，何況我們班有位愛好創曲的同學，他能發揮自己的所長，就如妳我以及其他已發揮潛能的同學都已獲得大家的鼓勵和讚賞，那我們就同來為正星鼓掌吧。
惠娥
For clarification, I retracted my previous comments and repost a new one.
ReplyDelete1) 如果是「鵬恆」班歌就應該有「鵬恆」二字
2) 樹人校歌有「樹人」二字, 樹人網站歌也有「樹人」二字, 「鵬恆」班是屬於樹人学校就應該有「樹人」二字
3) 「鵬恆」班歌歌詞應該含有「樹人」與「鵬恆」班的持貭, 歌詞應該簡單易唱易聽。 深奧難懂字詞、句子且與「鵬恆」班無相關都不是班歌的選擇
4) 我們寫作可以隨便嘻嘻哈哈, 可是班歌是代表全體, 我們不應該太過隨便-----班歌應該像样點
5) 老同学寫的意見應該反映自已正確的感覺, 應該說真心話, 否則会給人誤觧
6) 我們應該鼓勵與支持老同学繼續修改歌詞直到我們有一首不讓人嘲笑的班歌
李林祥的意見
各位同學好:
ReplyDelete抱歉!我的電腦不能運作,至此才能回應.關於班內歌曲;
正星能作曲就採用,不需用別首來作替;否則就失去義意.
對於同窗情是篇寫作不适合作歌詞.惠娥說得對,一改內容
就變換另意.林祥說要有樹人及鵬恆這四字;的確才是符合
班歌之意,林祥寫一些句子;一些意思可採取.班歌內容最好
跟在校學習和活動有關,及到美國相遇之關連.歌詞与寫作
不同,需要簡易明瞭、順暢即可.我想惠娥或同學中某一位可另
寫一詞,讓正星用原本他作的曲子配合,如能最好;不然先有
歌詞正星再作另曲,我說再做是怕原先歌曲難配合歌詞.
(原本歌曲很好聽).我覺得先做詞再由作曲去配合易過作
曲後去配合詞。
新年到來
祝: 諸位同學
健康吉祥
陳智
還是陳智行!
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Someone asked me to provide clarification on my previously posted comment. OK, no problem…
ReplyDeleteIn my previous comment, I suggested a list of items that I think should or should not be in the lyric-to-be for our class song. Specifically, in my opinion, the lyric should have the school name 樹人 and class name 鵬恆; it should mention old-days Tho-Nhon school activities; it should be simple to understand language; it should not be casually written since the song presents the whole class; it should sound reasonably like a class song (像样點) so that we, our class, will not be mocked at (不讓人嘲笑); and classmates should speak up with candid opinion and suggestion.
Those are my suggestions which are not, implicitly or explicitly, pointing to the first or second draft lyric under review. If people think my points have been addressed or embedded in the first or second draft, that is their opinion; if people believe my suggestions make no sense, it is also their opinion. I welcome all opinions.
On a side note, I normally praise classmates’ writing on web through comment section either because I like it or in the form of encouragement. I sometimes do joke with classmates, but I have never criticized anyone’s writing, knowing my weakness in Chinese language, and have never mocked using the term such as “感到啼笑皆非”like some people like to use. Also, in the past, I have been asked by classmate A to secretly correct an alleged wrong word in a published article written by classmate B, but I refused to do something behind a person’s back, and when I counter suggested classmate A to inform classmate B directly of the observation, classmate A backed out in fear of offending classmate B. Yet, classmate A would try to persuade me to correct someone’s writing in an under-the-table, sneaky manner. That is one of the many examples of tasks I have been asked to do in private but would not do when it comes to people’s writing. Being a person in charge of the web, I always try to be impartial and unbiased in my work, and fair to everyone within my reach.
Having said that, I hope that our classmates speak up own opinion about the class song instead of holding back and watching the “show.”
Sean